Giving out a link today that helped me solve a problem. It’s an article by Jeff Elkins at The Write Practice.
Three Tricks to Build Suspense and Engage Your Readers:
- A Race Against the Clock
- Hint at Solutions
- Connect the Unconnected
Today, this article helped me figure how to get out of a corner I’d written myself into. In my case, I went with all three: I added lawyer with a court order, so the detective only has X amount of time to examine to clue before it’s taken away (those clues will hint at solutions and connect the unconnected).
Experimenting with rhetoric today, on a pass-through of a first draft. Here’s the original:
Inside is a labyrinth crammed with bookshelves, floor-to-ceiling, with corridors just wide enough to maneuver a book cart. The overhead lights cast yellow beams and shadows all over the place. The room smells of ink and paper. Wet ink, not just from the books. It’s secluded, it’s probably impossible to hear anything in hear from the outside, and there are no cameras.
Here’s the new version:
Inside a labyrinth, crammed floor-to-ceiling with bookshelves, corridors just wide enough to maneuver a cart, overhead lights that cast withered rays and wicked shadows, the aroma of dust and ink and disregard, tucked away treasures and slumbering secrets, the dreams and nightmares of prey and predator, secluded, silent, and shut off from the world, awaits me in his lair.
Election day here in America. If you haven’t voted, go to iwillvote.com to find out how.
Emma Darwin has some great advice on what to do with stories that are too long, at her blog This Itch of Writing. Hers is another fantastic place to go if you want to learn the craft and you’ve got an afternoon or a weekend to burn.
Good luck to all the NaNoWriMo authors out there! I’ll see you next month. Don’t forget to eat and sleep and all that.
Reedsy’s blog has an excellent post on accumulated NaNoWriMo tips. If you haven’t heard of NaNoWriMo, November is National Novel Writing Month, where you challenge yourself to write a 50,000 word novel in thirty days. Quite the challenge.
Here’s 38 Tips for Kicking NaNoWriMo in the Butt This Year.
One of the things I notice from reading unpublished authors’ fantasy novels is that we Americans don’t have a lot of grounding in the ranks of nobility. Kings, dukes, barons: they are more than fancy titles. They actually mean something.
A full treatise on the subject would occupy many pages. This is primer.
- Emperor or Empress: rules an empire of kingdoms
Caesar is the Roman term for their emperor, from which Czar and Kaiser descend.
- King or Queen: rules a kingdom
Mahajari or Maharani is the Indian high king or queen.
- Archduke or archduchess: rules an archduchy, considered a monarch in his or her own right.
Also Grand Duke or Grand Duchess, basically the same.
- Crown Prince: is the acknowledged heir to the throne
The Prince of Wales is England’s Crown Prince; the Dauphin is the Crown Prince of France.
- Prince or Princess: the sons, daughters, and grandchildren of the king or queen
Prince is also a generic term for any ruler, particularly amongst themselves.
- Duke or Duchess: rules a duchy
There are eleven dukes in the modern England.
- Marchess or Marchioness: is a ruler of a land that borders another country.
Also Margrave in Germany. The title originally designated a military commander tasked with defending a border.
- Count or Countess: rules a county
In England, they are called Earls. There are about thirty earls in England.
- Viscount or Viscountess: is either the ruler of a viscounty or the descendent of deputy of a count
The French use Vicomte. England has three viscounts. In some kingdoms, viscount is not hereditary.
- Baron or Baroness: the lowest rank of nobility, barons rule a barony
England has almost sixty barons. This is the bulk of any kingdom’s noble class.
- Knights or Dames: this a granted title, not hereditary, that elevates someone into peerage
Military prowess is the surest way to become a knight, but it can and is granted for other services. The King or Queen may delegate his or her ability to knight people or not. Lesser nobles got in trouble for knighting people all the time.
I have a few pieces I go to when I feel the weight of writing getting to me. It’s a tough job, to put to paper these dreams and visions, and to show them to a world that’s way too full of dreams and visions. They have so many to choose from that yours need to shine like the sun.
One is Melinda Mae, by Shel Silverstein.
Have you heard of tiny Melinda Mae,
Who ate a monstrous whale?
That’s what writing feels like sometimes. The secret is small bites, lots of chewing, and persistence.
Jami Gold, paranormal and urban fantasy author, has a great post about Head Hopping, and why it is bad. Give it a read.
If the POV is unclear or changes too frequently, the reader doesn’t form as strong of a connection to the characters.
Jami has an amazing author blog, with over 600 posts on the writing craft. Check it out when you have an afternoon to burn.
So, you may seen the Twitter post making it’s way around claiming there are rules about language we didn’t know we knew. It’s from the book, The Elements of Eloquence, by Mark Forsyth.
Here is a BBC article on the viral post, and here is the paragraph in question:
Adjectives in English absolutely have to be in this order: opinion-size-age-shape-colour-origin-material-purpose Noun. So you can have a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife. But if you mess with that word order in the slightest you’ll sound like a maniac. It’s an odd thing that every English speaker uses that list, but almost none of us could write it out.